ninja story

so far the people in the story are

Adam
anthony
Emile
Natalie






Pm me if you dont mind being in the story.

sorry for double posting


Ninja story


Chapter 1: The hunt begins

The thief ran swiftly through the darkened streets of the village, clutching his package tightly to his chest. He ducked into an alleyway and bent down to catch his breathe. “Dangit man, how do you keep getting into these situations?” The thief said to himself. “Well now” said a voice from the darkness “when were through with you there wont be any more situations to trouble you so” The thief looked up in alarm, and then bolted out of the alleyway to continue running down the street. He felt himself slipping, and looked up just in time to se he was sliding down toward a rivers edge. “Thank the stars!” the thief whispered to himself. “You fool, did you think you could escape us?” said a voice, seemingly coming from nowhere. Then, before the thief’s astonished eyes, the very shadows in front of him seemed to form together into the shape of a cloaked man “You’re not very lucky, boy!” said the man in front of the thief. “Ill, ill give you the package, just don’t hurt me!” whimpered the small boy. “Too late” cackled the man and pulled out a dagger, which he promptly stabbed the boy with. The thief fell backwards into the water, still clutching the package in his final grasp. “NO!” screamed the man as he reached for the small bundle, but the corpse of the thief had already fallen into the depths of the river below.
The man let out a short curse as he disappeared into the shadows once more.

more to come, tell me what you think!

lol lolzzzzzzzz whos who? adam thief and emily the guy who kills him? =P

no, they havent come in yet. Ill use there names when they do.

ok

but waddya think?

its cool =] but we really dnt no the plot............

well, this is the prolouge so theres not alot of plot...

lolzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz....................... =]

umm, would you mind not posting unless it has to do with the story? it will be alot easier to read if the chapters arent all spread out.

ok. i think it is pretty cool. i think that the package should open while in the depths of the water below so thats how the ninjas(us) get our power. however the power lies dormant inside of us and only comes forth when u truly need it. u will hear a voice it will say "You are ready, child of the (element inserted here), Use your power to help others, and defeat all evil of the world."
hows that?

uh, its my story but I will take that into consideration. The package will be found, and the object inside it will be unleashed upon the world once more.

very good and suspenseful. just a couple grammar mistakes like were is suppose to we're. if u did that on purpose then never mind. also a one suggestion. u wrote that the boy said dangit. the boy is a small boy so don't u think that he shouldn't say dangit? when i read that the theif said "dangit man . . .", i thought the thief was about our age or older. maybe u shouldn't describe the boy as little. but so far so good. it will interesting to see how the names are used in your story . . . *evil look in eyes*

ok *duct tape on mouth* ya anthony keep writing on it. and ok well idc its anthonys story we should just leave him alone to write it..................

guys, guys. Ill put all of your thoughts into the story. Though I reserve the right to make my own character ( like henchman and people) to really stupid stuff. Muwahahahahaha YAY strange love circles... some include turtles...

turtle = adam right? =] ummmm u might wanna tell us whos in the love circles or elseeeeee................ we might get mad @ u..... and u wnt like what we can do anita petra >=]

Anthony wrote:uh, its my story but I will take that into consideration. The package will be found, and the object inside it will be unleashed upon the world once more.

I wuz the one who gave u the idea...i should at least get some credit right?

I know, its your idea, so Ill make sure to put in a note about that.

Ninja Story

Chapter 2: A walk in the park
Note: the characters in this story are all about 14-16 unless I say otherwise

It was a beautiful morning in the village. The sun was shining, the birds were chirping… and Adams alarm clock was going off. “Shut UP!” he said, picking up the alarm clock and chucking it out the open window next to his bed. “Gosh, I hate that stupid alarm clock” he said, getting up. He changed and opened the door to go out side, when a person hiding above the doorway put his head down and whispered, “Booga booga bogga.” Adam screamed “HOLY CRAP!” and then promptly hit the guy in the face. “ Why’d you do that Adam?” said the guy getting up to his feet. “Oh, its just you Emile.” said Adam “Well, why were you hiding up there?” “I was coming over to see where you were, when suddenly an alarm clock fell out of the sky and hit me on the head!” “Heheheh, funny story about that…” said Adam. But Emile continued talking “And since I was bored, I decided to wait out here and scare you when you came out. I wasn’t planning on getting hit in the head AGAIN.” “So” said Adam, “what do you want to do?” I thought we could hang out down in the park, I hear they’re giving out free donuts and” but he was cut off as Adam ran down the stairs yelling “FREE DONUTS!”
Later, after they had gotten their free donuts, they were walking around the village when suddenly Emile spotted something in the water. “ Hey man, what’s that?” he said, pointing to a large black thing floating through the river that wound around the park. “I’ll check it out said Adam and clambered down the riverbank, where he flipped the object over. “AUGHHHH!!!” screamed both of them, for the mysterious object was a boy about 10-12, obviously dead by the knife protruding from his chest. The scream brought a girl walking nearby to the scene. “So guys,” said Natalie looking at the two boys hiding behind a rock ‘ what scared you this time? A turtle or something?” “Its, it’s a dd-dead body over there!” said Adam, pointing to the corpse of the small boy over by the riverside. “So?” said Natalie. “Oh yeah, I forgot Natalie watches horror shows and stuff all the time.” whispered Adam to Emile. “She loves dead bodies and stuff like that.” “Hey look at this guy’s,” said Natalie, pointing to a cloth bundle in the boys’ hands. “What do ya think that is?” “ It’s a small box,” said Adam, unwrapping the bundle “But it just…wont…open” he said, as he tried to wrench open the box. “Oh well,” said Emile “Just throw it in back in the river” “Nah, I think Ill keep it” said Adam. As the three friends walked down the riverbank they were happy, blissfully unaware of the dark forces that were already beginning to conspire against them.
Far past the outskirts of the village, in a dark mountain stronghold, a man was sitting in a tall throne. Suddenly, the shadows on the floor in front of him formed into the shape of a man. “ So,” said the figure on the throne “ do you have the item which we seek?” “No master, please forgive me,” said the man cowering on the floor. “WHAT?” Exclaimed the man on the throne as he stood up. “ The thief held onto the package, rather then delivering it to us. I showed him the error of his ways, nut he took the package with him.” the man on the floor mumbled. “You have failed me,” the man on the throne said. “And for that, you will pay deeply” He stood up and ignoring the man’s pitiful cries, pointed his hand towards him. There was a flash of light and the man spoke no more, for mice cannot easily speak to humans. The man on the throne picked up the mouse, and opened up the cage he kept next to his throne. “Dinnertime my pet” he said as an abnormally large snake slithered out of the cage and locked the mouse in a deathly glare.

wow, king blah blah, your a pretty good writer. just a few things don't make sense. since the boy is about 10-12 yrs. old, which is pretty big, i think u should add in like adam flipped the object over but it was with great effort that he managed to do so. when u wrote that adam flipped the object over, i thought it was the package cuz it seemed that the object wasn't that heavy. and for the part, mice cannot easily speak to humans, shouldn't u write that mice cannot speak to humans?

I was heightining the drama...glad you liked it. I made thath last night but I had to go to sleep before posting it. but would you mind being in the story? I need one more character then Im good for the next 4-5 chapters.

um, i guess it's ok.

thanks, now I just have to wait until the others read it. got any ideas for stupid love circles? somebody PM'ed me to put in some but I suck at writing romance stories.

hmm, uh natalie and emile in love with each other maybe?
orrrrr, u could do a love triangle with emile and adam both in love with natalie and natalie in luv with emile

maybe, but for right now ill stick to adventure/humor. If alot of people want it, ill do romance as well.

u don't need to do much romance. just add a little bit in. just like how j.k. rowling did. just sprinkle a little in. too much will be bad.